Streams of Life

Streams of Life – NaPoWriMo 2015 Day 16 (to prompt)

A  Terzanelle:

Streams of life run quietly by,
Gloriously shining pebbly roads,
Never still, or broken, forwards is the cry,

Pour life in hearts of light abodes,
Release and run before the wind,
Gloriously shining pebbly roads.

Circle now where we, our life rescind,
As darkness dwells, denying light its place,
Release and run before the wind.

And so we turn, looking above for space,
Refusing to believe now is the time,
As darkness dwells, denying light its place,

We reach, searching for love sublime,
Feel the call of those we leave behind,
Refusing to believe now is the time,

Yet time it is to dive into the stream,
Gloriously shine pebbly roads,
Feel the call of those we leave behind,
Release and run forever before the wind.

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Today, the prompt is “to write in the form known as the terzanelle.” A technical and challenging prompt!

After much editing and ‘playing’ (!!)…, I think I got it right – well at least technically!

And the real challenge for me : how does it feel? Do you like it?

As always, I look forward to your comments….

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For those of you interested in the technical: the terzanelle is a hybrid of the villanelle and terza rima, Terzanelles consist of five three-line stanzas and a concluding quatrain. Lines and rhymes are chained throughout the poem, so that the middle line of each triplet is repeated as the last line of the following triplet (or, for the last triplet, in the concluding quatrain). Mmmm!

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9 comments on “Streams of Life – NaPoWriMo 2015 Day 16 (to prompt)

    • Thanks Elle. So glad you liked it! It This was my first one so it is great to hear that it worked from an experienced Writer in this form! Phew! 🙂
      Will pop across and read yours in a moment – only just up, coffee in hand! 🙂

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  1. I could see the repetition but didn’t know the form. I wrote a Pantoum once that required repetitive lines. It’s very difficult to pull off a form such as that. You did a splendid job! I think I will look up the terzanelle up and give a try.

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    • Fantastic! Thanks Laine! So pleased you enjoyed it! Your comment means a lot! I haven’t tried a Pantoum – will have a look after NaPoWriMo! (brain can only take so much! 😀). Look forward to reading your terzanelle…

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  2. Are you a glutton for punishment, or what? A true tour de force, lovely sounding lines and nice imagery…I especially like the shining pebbly roads. My source for this form gives it as even stricter (Lewis Turco, The Book Of Forms). I doubt I shall be trying this one soon. Bravo!

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    • Thank you so much Cynthia! Yes, feeling like I took a huge bite now – brain addled! 🙇 your comment means a great deal – thank you! So pleased you enjoyed it! Will look up your source tomorrow (gone 10 already here!). So chuffed it worked! Yay! 😁

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